Wen Hao, Thank you so much for sharing your honest thoughts with me. Remember this: You would not be here at NUS if you are not good enough. Don't underestimate your ability, ok? The experience you shared with us is interesting from the beginning to the end, and the ideas you discussed flowed logically from the past, present and future--great job.
Language: Pay attention to the following errors 1. Don't put too many ideas in one sentence. Especially for a student like me, with more things I experienced, I sadly find that I am really not good enough, and there are still many things I ever thought I did good much worse than someone I met.
2. What does this part of the sentence mean? ….I ever thought I did good much worse than someone I met.
3. Be careful with the use of tenses in these sentences: You referred to past events/experiences, so past tense should be used. -When I was in my Junior High school, I was the most top student in my school, and i am not only excellent in my academic studies but also do well in singing and communicating.
-However, my day-dream broke after I enrolled in my Senior High school which is the best high school in my homeland.
-During the period I studied there, I knew lots of classmates and schoolmates who are better than me,
-Sometimes, I consoled myself that the student who is better than me in this field is worse than me in that field. Nonetheless, what if there comes a student who does better than me in every aspects?
VERY GOOD USE OF TENSES: THUMBS UP!!! I still remember how I felt at that time, powerless and despaired. But I could not give up because I knew I did not try my best, and I still could improve.
4. Missing verb: Can you spot the error? So, at that time I really thought I the center of the world.
5. Incorrect use of article (a/an): Seriously, I do not want to focus on one thing because I do not want to be a expert.
6. Now or past? -What I want are just to know more and learn widely. I used my free time to read books or to learn from teachers. -Till now, I picked a quite number of new skills such as playing guitar, translating classical Chinese language and commenting LOL.
7. Don't connect too many ideas in one sentence: Nowadays, I still meet many people who are better than me in many fields, however I do not feel as bad as the previous, as I know that I am still learning.
Wen Hao,
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for sharing your honest thoughts with me. Remember this: You would not be here at NUS if you are not good enough. Don't underestimate your ability, ok? The experience you shared with us is interesting from the beginning to the end, and the ideas you discussed flowed logically from the past, present and future--great job.
Language: Pay attention to the following errors
1. Don't put too many ideas in one sentence.
Especially for a student like me, with more things I experienced, I sadly find that I am really not good enough, and there are still many things I ever thought I did good much worse than someone I met.
2. What does this part of the sentence mean?
….I ever thought I did good much worse than someone I met.
3. Be careful with the use of tenses in these sentences: You referred to past events/experiences, so past tense should be used.
-When I was in my Junior High school, I was the most top student in my school, and i am not only excellent in my academic studies but also do well in singing and communicating.
-However, my day-dream broke after I enrolled in my Senior High school which is the best high school in my homeland.
-During the period I studied there, I knew lots of classmates and schoolmates who are better than me,
-Sometimes, I consoled myself that the student who is better than me in this field is worse than me in that field. Nonetheless, what if there comes a student who does better than me in every aspects?
VERY GOOD USE OF TENSES: THUMBS UP!!!
I still remember how I felt at that time, powerless and despaired. But I could not give up because I knew I did not try my best, and I still could improve.
4. Missing verb: Can you spot the error?
So, at that time I really thought I the center of the world.
5. Incorrect use of article (a/an):
Seriously, I do not want to focus on one thing because I do not want to be a expert.
6. Now or past?
-What I want are just to know more and learn widely. I used my free time to read books or to learn from teachers.
-Till now, I picked a quite number of new skills such as playing guitar, translating classical Chinese language and commenting LOL.
7. Don't connect too many ideas in one sentence:
Nowadays, I still meet many people who are better than me in many fields, however I do not feel as bad as the previous, as I know that I am still learning.